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Post by mirandarr. on Mon Jun 25, 2012 5:16 am

That's so...depressing. Makes me sniffle in sadness. Sad
If she dies, I may actually cry. I'm overly sensitive, aha.
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Post by Daugie Poynter on Mon Jun 25, 2012 5:34 am

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Post by HannaWestwood on Mon Jun 25, 2012 9:31 am

Woo, wait, where does that Hannah come from?! scratch . . .
Oh, it's more than awesome if it's what i think it is Very Happy

Aww I love Tom in this! Heidi likes him? ^o^


God, I’m so tired.’ Danny sat down next to me and slammed his head down on the table before muttering ‘and now I have a headache.
HAHAHAHA XD That was epic! Thanks Danny, you made my night better! xD

Super update! New characters (Steph, Hannah, Harry is more present) but also troubles and sadness for Rachel because of her mom and dad issues =/

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Post by if looks could kill on Tue Jun 26, 2012 4:13 am

Gah! Thank you for reading !!
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Post by if looks could kill on Tue Jun 26, 2012 5:11 am

Chapter 12
‘I know it’s tough for you to concentrate but we urge you to go home as you have education to see to.’ The tall doctor repeated in a calm voice.
‘My mom is in there, unconscious and you expect me to go to school?’ Danny was starting to make a scene.
‘Danny, don’t shout. Your mom would want you to go to school anyway.’ I placed my hand on his but he stood, ripping it away.
‘Why are you talking about my mom like she’s dead?’ His blue eyes were full to the brim with anger and sorrow. ‘She’s not. She won’t! She’ll keep fighting. This won’t beat her.’ He shook his head at me, desperation in his eyes.

‘Danny, I didn’t mean-‘
‘I know what you meant!’ He spat, cutting me off.

I sat staring at him as more tears cascaded down his cheeks. I felt my own brewing in the back of my throat, so I continuously swallowed to lessen the burning.
‘I’m sorry.’ The words rolled off my tongue before I could control them.
‘No. No you’re not.’ He flailed his arms around as she shouted.
‘Do you two want a separate room to discuss?’ The male doctor calmly added.
‘No. I’m leaving. I’ll be back straight after school tomorrow though.’ He turned to the doctor, whom nodded in return, and he faced away from me and walked down the white hall towards the exit.

‘Well done, ass face.’ Chrissie rolled her eyes and sighed.
‘Chrissie, don’t be so harsh on your sister. She was trying to be there for Daniel and he took her words the wrong way which is acceptable as his head is probably spinning right now. We all know how it feels.’ My mother spoke the wisest of words I had heard the entire night.

‘Chrissie, you and Rachel get the bus home. I’ll stay here with Meredith.’ My mom said and stared straight on with the don’t-argue-with-me-just-do-as-I-say face.
Chrissie and I understood too well that it was going to be hard for our mom to lose her best friend, so we nodded and stood from our seats. Bending down I planted my lips on my mother’s cheek.
‘Love you mom.’ I whispered.

Not waiting for a reply I turned around and walked down the hall with my sister.

***

‘I’d rather not talk about it.’ I repeated.
‘But if you do want to, I’m here.’ Heidi said, again.
‘I know, and thankyou.’ I nodded.

After a five minute silence, I lay down my cheese sandwich and turned to the girl I call my bestfriend.
‘Okay. I need advice.’
‘Okie shmokes.’ She shoved one more mouthful of pasta into her mouth and stared at me, waiting for me to ask.

‘Well, Danny kind of flipped at me last night…’ I continued to tell her what happened at the hospital and she continued to bite her lip.
‘What do I do, H?’ I tried to stifle my tears but as I heard my own voice crack and wobble I couldn’t help but release the salt-y liquid down my cheeks.
‘You’ve got to talk to him. Tell him that you didn’t mean it like that. His head is clearly like a washing machine at the moment…’ She then opened her arms and enveloped me in a hug.
‘Remember after your dad’s funeral, we had that huge argument. What would you have done if I didn’t come up to you and explained myself and we both talked it out?’
‘I probably wouldn’t have coped as well as I did.’ I found myself sobbing over her school jumper.

She pulled away and looked at me. ‘Danny needs you. Like you needed me.’

***
Sighing he combed his fingers through his short brown hair, remembering the day before when Rachel claimed she preferred his curly hair. Smiling a little, he pictured her smile and how they were so happy yesterday.

‘Are we sitting with the girls?’ Tom asked.
‘Why?’ Tom asked again as Danny shook his head.
‘I can’t sit next to her after what happened last night.’ The brunette replied, adjusting the strap of his bag on his shoulder. ‘I think… I think I know what she meant, but it was wrong of her to say it like that.’

Tom stopped and stood infront of Danny as they stepped outside.
‘Okay, my cousin will never try and hurt someone’s feelings about an ill or dead family member and we all know why.’ Tom stood up for Rachel but in a rational way. ‘You know how much she cares about you, she wouldn’t want to hurt you like that.’

Tom glanced over Danny’s shoulder and sighed. ‘And I think that’s proof over there that she didn’t mean anything that she said, to come across in a horrible way.’
Danny turned and followed Tom’s eye line.

What he saw was terrible. Rachel held onto her bestfriend so tight as she sobbed. He’d never seen so many tears stream from her eyes before. He could hear the sobs from where he stood. Before she opened her eyes and saw him staring, he backed away and ran back inside.

‘Where are you going?’ Tom frowned, running after him.
‘I can’t stand watching her when she’s so upset.’ He frowned and folded his arms as he leaned against the cream wall of the canteen.
‘Go upto her and speak to her.’ Harry’s posh voice made Danny jump a little, his eyes looking up.
‘You’ve wanted her and liked her for years now and you’re not going to speak to her to try and fix it?’ Dougie appeared next to Harry with a sandwich in his mouth.

Danny sighed, glancing at each one of his best friends. Although he had a reason for overreacting, he should try and talk it out with her. He needed her.



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Post by HannaWestwood on Tue Jun 26, 2012 5:17 am

Awww Danny forgive her! You didn't get what she meant! Aww he's so cute Very Happy

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Post by Daugie Poynter on Tue Jun 26, 2012 5:55 am

DANIEL JONES!!!

yes its very sad about ur mother but don't take it out on rachel!!! imma come after you kid!!!

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Post by mirandarr. on Tue Jun 26, 2012 9:38 am

Go ahead, Mr. Jones, and work it out with Rachel. YOU BELONG TOGETHER...even if there's a misinterpretation.
Ugh, still feeling bad for Danny and his mother though. Poor things.

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Post by ChloeRussellx on Wed Jun 27, 2012 1:14 am

Danny is such a typical guy - stubborn!
Listen to your friends and go talk to Rachel you silly noonoo head!!
Can't wait for the next chapter Very Happy

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Post by if looks could kill on Fri Jun 29, 2012 7:35 am

Chapter 13
‘I drop the pencil on the floor, she bends down and shows me more… That’s what I go to schoo-‘ Heidi stopped singing as a finger tapped her on the shoulder, squealing a little she jumped around to face the dark brown eyes.
‘Sorry, didn’t mean to startle you.’ Tom scratched his head and smiled, showing his cute dimple.

‘No… It’s fine.’ She felt her cheeks burning. How embarrassing.
‘Um, I- I just wondered…’ Tom pondered.

***
I stopped half way down the corridor when I saw Tom doing his awkward shuffle with his feet. He’s popping the question. Smiling to myself I shook my head and turned, I might aswell do a lap around the school, give Heidi time to jump and say yes. She’s always wanted a date to the prom.

My stomach suddenly turned as I thought of Danny. I just wanted everything to be okay again. But how can I speak to him when he thinks so low of me now.

Instead of walking straight on, a body clashed with mine causing me to stumble backwards.
‘Uh, sorry…’ The new fresh face smiled a little, his hand resting on my arm steadying me.
‘No problem.’ I smiled back.
‘Um, could you possibly tell me where room 43 is?’ He frowned and scratched his head.
‘Are you fresh meat?’ I asked.
Laughing at my term he nodded. ‘First day today, been so hectic.’
‘Well,’ as I told him the directions for the room he was searching for he continuously smiled, his emerald green eyes sparkling.
‘Thanks.’ He mumbled and smiled charmingly before walking in the direction I’d just come from.

‘Who was that?’ Heidi’s excitable but confused voice entered my ears.
‘New kid.’ I answered and turned to face her. Her smile was as wide as I expected.
‘Tom asked me to prom.’ She squealed and jumped up and down on the spot.
‘You know I’d jump with you if I found him attractive but being his cousin, I don’t want to go there.’

‘Um.’ Heidi quietened. ‘Lover boy at six o’clock… your six, not mine.’
Spinning around, his blue eyes met mine. Something told my feet to move, he was getting closer and closer by the second. He had a plea in his eyes... or was it anger. My feet began to move. They moved fast. But not in his direction.

***
Danny stood staring at her, confused why she was walking away from him. He only wanted to talk to her, get this past them. He really needed her right now.

Sighing he ran after her down the corridor.
"Rach!"
Everybody's attention turned to him and then they looked down the corridor at the brunette storming away.
Accidentally he knocked shoulders with someone, sending him to crash to the floor.
‘Watch where you’re going.’ Matt turned around and spat in Danny’s direction.
Instead of retaliating, he stood and began to walk the way he was going.
‘You’re just going to walk away?’ He heard Matt laugh but he continued to walk and ignore. ‘Tell your mom she was great in bed last night.’

Danny froze. The brunette whom he was chasing in front of him froze too. The whole corridor fell silent as they looked at Matt, a mixture of disbelief and shock. Spinning around, her eyes met his. They were full of anger, sorrow and hatred. Rachel stormed back up the corridor, fists clenched by her sides. Danny turned as she stomped past him, he’d never seen her so angry. Tears attempted to balance on her bottom lids, she bit down on her lip harshly.

‘Oh, what you gonna do? Stick up for your –‘ Before he could finish, Rachel’s clenched fist collided with his cheek bone, pushing his jaw out of place as he toppled to the floor.

Without a single word, she turned and walked away from Matt who was crumpled on the floor holding his jaw. As Danny’s eyes followed Rachel, her eyes lifted at met his again. He could see a slight glint of forgiveness in there, but he couldn’t leave it at that.

As she walked past he took one look back at Matt who was now surrounded by laughing people, Danny couldn’t help but smile.
Now spinning around, chuckling, he ran after his feisty girlfriend.

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Post by ChloeRussellx on Fri Jun 29, 2012 8:00 am

Good on ya Rachel!
That Matt is a complete and utter dick!
Maybe Danny needs to try again to knock some sense into him!

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Post by Daugie Poynter on Fri Jun 29, 2012 12:01 pm

OH YEA RACHEL IS A SECRET BADASS!!

lol matt should just stay on the floor and just get outta here lol

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Post by HannaWestwood on Fri Jun 29, 2012 7:05 pm

Boooyaaaah! Good one Rach!
She sent him to the floor, how good was that! Bwahaha Very Happy

She seems able to forgive him and him to forgive her now Smile

Awww Tom popped the question!!! ♥️

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Post by if looks could kill on Sat Jun 30, 2012 2:10 am

Thanks for reading guys!
Yeah, Rach turned bad ass!
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Post by if looks could kill on Sat Jun 30, 2012 3:47 am


Chapter 14
‘Rach.’ I heard him call from behind. Still wincing in pain I turned around, clutching my right hand tightly.
The autumn breeze slipped through my hair, knotting the strands together loosely as I stood just at the bottom of the entrance steps.

He stopped about a centimetre away from me and without one word he wrapped his arms around me. Although his stomach was pressing against my broken knuckles, it was nice to feel his body against mine.

‘I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to sna-‘ He pulled away from me and I pressed my index finger on his lips.
‘I’m sorry. I shouldn’t have said what I did, I knew what I meant but my mouth didn’t put it the way I would preferred. I really am sorry, Dan.’

‘I know. I’m sorry for making you cry.’ He said under my finger, I slowly dropped my hand and let it lie on his chest as he placed his finger under my chin.
‘Making me cry?’ I felt my voice crack.
‘I saw you at lunch.’
‘Where? I didn’t know you were near by…’
‘That doesn’t matter. I’m just really sorry. Can we put this behind us? ‘Cause I need you. I need you more than anything.’ He pleaded not only with his words but his eyes begged me to understand.
‘Of course.’ I nodded, leaning in to kiss him I saw his smile before my lips met his. I could still feel his smile as our lips moved in sync.

‘You know what would make this all better?’ We pulled away, his blue eyes glistened. ‘If you let me take you to prom.’
I couldn’t help the grin that grew on my face. Nodding his lips crashed down on mine again even though I was still smiling. Giggling I wrapped my arms around his neck and let him kiss me all he liked.

***
‘Katy, who’re you going to prom with?’ Stephanie turned to her “friend”.
‘Dougie obviously.’ Katy rolled her eyes and flicked her blonde hair behind her back. She knew Dougie would ask her, it was obvious he liked her.
‘Oh. But…’
‘Look, Stephanie, we both know he doesn’t like you back. So get over it and be happy for me.’ Katy snapped flicking her blonde hair, twirling on her heel and heading out.

Stephanie felt a lump in her throat as she stared at Katy wobbling in her stupidly high heels as she walked away.

Jumping forward as she heard a locker open behind her, she glanced in the direction and had a double take at who stood there.
He glanced over and smiled a half smile. ‘Hey.’

‘H-hey.’ She smiled back but refused to make eye contact. Instead she stared at his black converse.
Her heart slowed down as his feet slowly moved his body away from where they stood. She’s always had a thing for Dougie. Sighing she slammed her locker shut and walked the way Katy did back to prom.

***

‘I have no date to the prom.’ Harry frowned as he walked beside Tom and Dougie.
‘Nor me.’ Dougie shrugged. ‘It’s just a night where we all dress up for the end of school. It’s not like you need a date.’
‘I’ve asked Heidi.’ Tom bit his lip before looking at his friends to witness their grins.

‘She likes you back.’ Harry shrugged.
‘I-I don’t think she does.’ Tom shook his head, he was always in denial about girls.
‘Did she say yes?’ Doug questioned.
Tom nodded in return.
‘Well if she didn’t like you she wouldn’t say yes.’ Harry swiped his palm across the back of Tom’s head.
‘I have a week to get a date.’ Harry was determined to ask one person and one person only.
‘Ask Hannah,’ Rachel hopped next to Dougie and grinned. ‘she’s also been moaning that she hasn’t got a date.’

‘Am I the only one who doesn’t care about prom?’ Doug raised a brow, he couldn’t understand why everyone was fussing over such a small event. Walking out the gate, Dougie couldn’t believe his eyes.

‘Get out of my way, dweeb.’ Matt’s hand crashed against Stephanie’s back causing her to fly off her feet. Her body skidded across the hard, rough gravel.

‘I actually hate him.’ Rachel huffed and toddled over to Stephanie helping her up.
‘Matt. How about you just leave everyone the fuck alone.’ Dougie snapped.
Matt turned around and laughed humourlessly ‘Little Douglas is picking a fight with me.’
Rachel turned and practically hissed her words ‘Don’t make me punch you twice in a day.’

Bringing up the event made Matt’s cheeks burn a light red, his friends laughed at his embarrassment.
‘You punched him?’ Dougie laughed as Matt walked off in shame.

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Post by ChloeRussellx on Sat Jun 30, 2012 5:32 am

Aww Danny and Rachel are adorable together <3
Arghh Matt needs to do one! He's gotta be the most infuriating person ever!

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Post by HannaWestwood on Mon Jul 02, 2012 1:24 am

ha-HA! Take this Matt!

Awwww is Harry going to ask Hannah? Hiiiiii ♥️

Tom popped it! Tom popped it! Hell yes guys! You surprised? He got a date before ya Razz

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Post by Daugie Poynter on Mon Jul 02, 2012 2:20 am

Awwww Danny and Rach so cute!!!! XD

Wait a minute....

BLONDIE U BETTA COME BACK AND LET ME PUNCH U OUTTA UR HEELS!!! WTF MATT IMMA KICK HIS ASS!!!
Lol Woooooow good dougie da f ask me out!!! Lmao
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Post by heidi_kirsty on Mon Jul 02, 2012 6:14 am

OMG so much going on that i've missed!!!
glad i've read to catch up.
i adore Danny right now, the relationship between him and Rachel is just so beautiful and heart wrenching cause of his mum, but i love the support they have between them.
i was totally cheering when Matt got a smack in the face, he has just been digging himself a deeper hole, lets hope he gets a kick in the nuts soon enough!!
Dougie and Harry at one point i thought they were gay as they were always together but now i'm convinced otherwise haha prom with girls, big give away.
PROM? urm... oh no :s but with TOM? yes please Smile
cant wait to read more, love it
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Post by if looks could kill on Sat Jul 07, 2012 1:56 am

Sorry it's taken me so long to update guys! I've had a work load as I've started my last year before university now. *eek

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Post by if looks could kill on Sat Jul 07, 2012 2:08 am

Chapter 16
‘Um… Hannah…’ Harry’s posh accent made Hannah’s lips curve into a smile.
‘Yes?’ She turned around showing her smile.
'I wanna ask you someth-'
‘Hey guys,’ Dougie jumped into the conversation, cutting Harry off, causing him to sigh in frustration. ‘Fancy going to my uncle’s club? There will be some fit birds there.’

‘Is there going to be man candy?’ Heidi appeared by the side of them.
Tom stood beside her and coughed.
She looked up at him and grinned cheesily.
‘Yeah, it’ll be a good night out.’ Doug grinned.

Harry turned and stared at Hannah. She nodded at him, her blue eyes smiling with her lips ‘Yeah, I’m up for it.’
Dougie then turned to Harry for approval and pleased him when he nodded.
‘Did I hear night club?’ Danny popped his head above Harry’s shoulder with a grin on his face.
‘Yes.’ Doug smiled.
‘I’m in.’ He laughed.
‘Me too.’ Rachel’s voice echoed from behind Danny.

***
‘Hear that?’ Katy smirked.
‘Yes, are we going?’ The male replied.
‘Of course.’ She grinned.

***

‘Babe, are you ready yet?’ Danny called from downstairs.
‘Almost.’ Shouting back I took one more glance at my reflection. The person looking back didn’t look that bad for once. My long hair spiralled down past my breasts, the dark green dress clung to my body perfectly and ended just below my bum.

Clutching my heels and bag in my hands I made my way downstairs.
‘Wow.’ Danny’s voice was hardly a whisper as his eyes widened.
I couldn’t help but smile. For once, someone thought I looked nice.
‘You like?’ I laughed as I reached the ground floor.
‘No.’ He walked closer and wrapped his arms around my waist. ‘I love.’

Grinning like a Cheshire cat I pressed my lips against his. The kiss was soon interrupted by an impatient knock on the front door.

Opening to the wonderful faces of my bestfriends I invited them in.
‘Don’t bother sitting down.’ I said before their bums touched the cream sofas. ‘I’m ready.’
‘You’re kidding.’ Heidi frowned as she forced herself to her feet.
‘As if.’ Hannah laughed.
‘She’s been getting ready since the end of school.’ Danny informed them.
‘That doesn’t make a difference with Rach. She’s always late.’ Heidi rolled her eyes and walked over, Hannah following.
‘She’ll forget something though.’ Hannah stated in a mutter heading for the door.
'I made a check list! I'm fine!' I defended myself before receiving a few odd looks.

After a long taxi journey we arrived at the club. It was large, I’d passed it a couple of times before when I’ve been in town. It always looked so cool inside, the lights always flashing and the music booming out. Now we had VIP passes and I was going to experience the music. Finally, a way to escape the shit life.

After entering the loud environment we went straight to the bar and ordered our drinks. ‘Martini without the olive… hate olives.’ I wrinkled my nose at the thought.
‘No no. You’re having something stronger.’ Hannah grinned.
‘I don’t want to get smashed out of my-‘
‘Ten whiskey shots on the go.’ Hannah interrupted me and spoke to the barman.
‘Haha, looks like you are. Don’t worry, I’ll look after you.’ Danny laughed kissing my cheek.

‘Woah. Order some more of those whiskey’s. Mr Poynter, Fletcher and Judd in the house.’ Harry jumped to our side grinning.
‘He’s already had a few.’ Stephanie spoke up. She had a crop top on with a pair of dark, high wasted shorts and heeled shoes.
‘I really like what you’re wearing.’ I shouted over the music.
‘Thanks, you look stunning.’ She smiled back. I have no idea why she ever hung around with Katy.

‘Don’t lie Stephanie, she looks like a slut.’ Ironically the horrid voice of Katy shouted into my ear.
‘How the fuck did you get in?’ Danny snapped.
‘Sweet talking the bodyguard.’ She smiled and flicked her blonde hair from her plump cheeks.
‘Ha, oh you’re really funny.’ Hannah laughed humourlessly as she looked Katy up and down, causing me to smile.
‘You better keep your girl away from me, Jones.’ Katy snapped. ‘And you better keep her away from my boy.’

‘You have a boy?’ I raised a brow.
‘Don’t say me. I might barf.’ Dougie backed away slightly.
‘Thanks, but no. Adam is my boy.’ Katy smirked and as if on queue a familiar face stood next to her handing her a shot of tequila.

‘You!’ I gasped as I recognised him. His green eyes, his short brown hair. ‘The new kid.’
‘The new kid?’ Danny crinkled brow.
‘Yeah, I bumped into him just before you ran after me in the corridor.’ I explained.
‘Oh yeah! Katy, she’s the pretty face I was telling you about.’ Adam smirked and winked at me.
Feeling my cheeks burn I hugged into Danny, at least trying to drop a hint I wasn’t available. Danny wrapped his arms around me obviously grasping the idea.

‘Oh, isn’t that cute.’ Katy’s jealousy didn’t wipe from her eyes even when she tried to be spiteful. ‘I’ll leave you to it.’

Without another word she spun on her heel and headed to the dance floor with Adam, pushing everyone out of her way. I noticed how she didn't even have to try to push. Her large, overwhelming body did it for her.
'Fat cow.' Heidi sneered.
‘Bitch.’ Stephanie spat.
Dougie’s mouth curved into a smile as he looked at Steph. ‘Wanna dance?’
‘I don’t really… dance-‘ Before she could back away, Dougie grabbed her hand and pulled her towards the crowd whilst laughing.

‘Fancy dancing?’ Danny asked.
Grinning up at him I smacked his bum and giggled, I have always been a light weight. ‘Of course.’
‘The kinky bitch.’ Harry said in a deep voice causing every one to burst into laughter.
‘She’s gone already.’ Heidi shook her head.
‘She’s always been a light one.’ Tom took another shot. ‘Good luck, Dan.’

‘I’m sure I’ll be fine.’ He laughed as I pulled him away from them and onto the dance floor. As the alcohol ran through my body and upto my brain, I didn’t seem to care what happened on the dance floor. ‘Babe, do you want another drink?’
‘I’m fine.’ I shook my head knowing I had too much at the bar.
‘Well I’m not leaving you here on your own.’ He smiled being all protective-boyfriend-like.
‘Just go, I’m like a meter away from you.’ I kissed him then twirled him around and pushed him towards the bar.

Dancing on my own wasn’t that bad. I just sung loudly to the words I knew and turned around when I felt Danny’s hands on my waist.
‘Hey ba-’ I widened my eyes 'Fuck off!' I shouted and pushed Adam off me.
‘You called me babe.’ He smirked.
‘No, I thought you were Danny.’ I said even though it had probably come out a bit slurred. I'm sure it sounded more along the lines of: "No, I thoot you we Dan-D-Nee."
‘Is there a problem?’ Katy appeared beside Adam. Great. Hurry up with the drinks, Dan.

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|Above the Noise tour 2011|
|Keep Calm and Play Louder tour 2012|

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Post by ChloeRussellx on Sat Jul 07, 2012 2:32 am

Get your hands off Rachel, Adam!
Now shit's gonna go down cos of the jealous bitch, Katy!
I hate her already!
In desperate need of the next chapter!!

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Post by HannaWestwood on Sat Jul 07, 2012 8:22 pm

THE KINKY BITCH!!! ♥️ Hahaaaaa Very Happy

FUCK OFF, ADAM!!! >< Can't wait for Danny to come back!

Ohh Dougie! Why the hell did you interrupt Harry?! He was about to ask me out! Buuuh!!! Sad

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Post by Daugie Poynter on Sun Jul 08, 2012 2:27 am

Urghhhhh I hate Katy!!!
Pleaseeeeee just let me give her and Adam a beating!!!
Yaaaaaay dougie asked me to dance wahooooooo!!!
Danny hurry back! Nooooowww

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Chapter 17
‘She called me babe and had her hands all over me.’ Adam winked at me again.
‘You were what?!’ Katy fumed.
‘I did fuck all.’ I held up my hands in defence.
‘Don’t lie.’ Adam smirked.
‘I’m not ly-‘
‘What the hell are you guys doing?’ Danny pushed between them and rushed to my side.
‘She had her hands all over me, mate. I’d let go of her, she’s a slut.’ Adam laughed.

‘Don’t call Rachel a slut.’ Danny gritted his teeth.
‘She did. She called him babe aswell.’ Katy added.
‘What? you weren’t even there.’
‘So you did call him babe?’ She folded her arms.
‘Yes, but no… sort of.’ I stumbled over my words.
‘Did you?’ Danny looked down at me.
Looking up at him I just wanted to scream at him, then I imagined myself being dragged to a mental asylum for the night.

‘She asked for me to go to the toilets with her.’ Adam added clearly seeing I was about to tell Danny what actually happened.
‘What?!’ I almost screamed. I felt Danny’s arm fall from my waist.
‘Is this true?’ He questioned.
‘No!’ I truthfully told.
‘She’s lying.’ Katy spat.
‘She is, mate.’ Adam said.

Shaking his head Danny walked away from me. Turning their heads from Danny, the pair looked back at me, they both smirked at me. I glanced to the back of Danny's head as he walked towards the bar. A lump rose in my throat.

***

‘Never give Rachel drinks.’ Danny shook his head.
‘Why?’ Heidi frowned.
‘She’s out her face and Adam and Katy are trying to tell me that she was flirting with him.’ Dan rolled his eyes. He didn’t believe a word. He turned to the bartender and smiled ‘Bottle of water please?’

‘Wait, where is she?’ Tom asked.
‘Dance floor.’ He replied.
‘Erm…’ Heidi stood on her tip-toes and searched the crowd. She couldn’t see her or anyone who looked anything like her.
‘Dan, you left my cousin wasted with Katy and Adam?’ Tom frowned and him.

Danny grabbed the bottle of water and ran back to where she was standing with tweedle dum and tweedle dee.
‘Crap crap crap crap.’ He muttered to himself.
‘She’s gone home’ Adam shouted behind Danny.
‘What?’
‘She’s gone home. She was crying and shit.’ Adam said.
‘Shit.’ Danny smacked the palm of his hand on his forehead. Why didn’t he take her to the bar? Why did he have to be so dumb?

***
‘I’m not just a bitch you know.’ She shrugged her shoulders. ‘Adam’s getting Danny right now, I realised that lying was stupid. I guess I’m just jealous.’
‘Um… right, it’s okay. I’ll just walk home.’ I said but she grabbed my wrist.
‘Adam is telling Danny to meet you at the bar in ten minutes. So wipe those tears and I’ll meet you inside, okay?’ She smiled. I frowned in return. Why was she being nice?

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